House of Lost Dreams
She is planning to change HLD and she wants opinions on the best format, both physically and in terms of writing.
The marker coloring looks okay, but perhaps she should use straight lines between the panels.
I also see the text boxes were placed over the original handwritten text.
Depending on how quickly she wants the strips to be posted, if she wants to take time, she should keep the manual coloring, if not, she should switch to digital color and thinner outlines.
The text doesn't have to be digital. Just about every artist writes it by hand, but beforehand they draw lines so that the text is written straight.